This one grabbed me last Monday after some weird dreams.&nbsp; I think they were triggered by playing too much Twenty.&nbsp; The problem was, the dream gave me the first big scene, then... that was it.&nbsp; I wanted to know what happened to Nami and Carla, and at times it was a struggle to find out what happened next.<br /><br />These two are going to have some interesting times ahead...<br /><br />There's a change in tense at the first break.&nbsp; I didn't even notice it at first.&nbsp; This happens pretty often when I'm writing stories, and when I find it I usually fix it by editing one section or the other.&nbsp; This time... I liked how the transition felt, so I moved one sentence and added a section break.&nbsp; I'd like to hear how it works for others.<br /><br />This is a rough draft, mostly 'cause I want to move on from the story and get back to the Button or something...