EDIT-
Massive facelift on this one, I really wasn't happy with the first version of it.
Changes include a clean up of events, more detailed events and a change in tense from past to present.
I think it reads a lot better than the previous flawed version.
Hope you guys enjoy.
It is down to
now to continue and to finish the story as he sees fit. I'm sure if he takes it further that things will turn out great and suitably perilous.