Commas, commas. Too many commas. Really got ahead of me, especially with how complacent my sentence structure ended up being. And don't get me started on synonyms.<br /><br />I am also flabberghasted that this thing was able to upload in one file. I was sure I'd have to split it in to like Deco's Department Store.<br /><br />This story also showed me that I need more work writing longer stories in a standard third person format - but hey, that's part of the reason I do this.<br /><br />A lot of transformations in this one, including one that's... strange-ish. Originally, this story started out as simply the first change with Lillianne and the last bit with Kyrielle. Then I thought Lillianne ought to have a crew, and the whole thing blew up.<br /><br />Enjoy, hopefully.