This is a re-write of a story I wrote around Christmas time.<br />I wasn't satisfied and/or comfortable with how it originally turned out, so I decided to re-visit it.<br />The intro part is mostly the same, but it then goes off into completely different events.<br /><br />Personally, I consider this the "official" version, especially because I might want to follow up on it and do more with these characters.<br />However, I decided to leave the other one up, since it is vastly different in tone and events and feedback on it was actually quite good.<br /><br />Let me know what you think about the changes, I personally am very much more happy with this.