I need to be less dead. Have something longer to not really make up for it.<br /><br />The Doll Shop was one of my older stories, done as a request for someone on another forum. While a lot of people seem to like it, I don't think I did a very good job on it, and decided to have another shot at it. I don't think it's my best, but hopefully it's decent.<br /><br />Please leave feedback in the comments, and let me know exactly what you think of it, negative or positive. If it's negative, please tell me what I did wrong so that I can improve.