List of Changes

Major Changes
-Altered the layout of the chapter, moved dreams out of 18.2 to be the ending of 18.1. Basically, it's 18.1 on Alex's up to the line "I'm cautious", and everything after that point is swapped out for the dreams. 18.2 will take the 18.1 lattr half and be re-arranged also.

-Altered the dream positioning: Now, Shining says goodbye to his Dungeons and Dragons... er, O&O group "last" (first), rather than his family. This was done to imply he had one last session with them.

-Also altered the timing of dreams: The implication is that there is now a gap of at least a day between the O&O dream and the farewell family dream, and then another day-gap between the farewell dream and the talk with Cherry Coke et all.

-The talk with Cherry Coke and Co has been altered to be an academy induction, with the first year academy recruits from all equestria attending a single school in Manehattan before being sent out to other schools as explained in the chapter itself.
--It is also clarified that this basically IS a high school, though this might still be edited to fit Alex's preferences right now (figured out a possible compromise).

-I altered the discussion of the O&O a bit, so that SA tries to mention Hoofball last, and that Cherry Coke is mildly confused. I added a few lines where a major cuts in to refute the misconceptions a little.

Smaller Changes
-Adjusted some spelling and grammar.

-Tweaked and adjusted a few lines to personal preferences.

-I added a few more lines for clarity and consistency, as well as adjusted a few. Some examples:
-Changed "through Tartarus on Equestria" to "to Tartarus and back"
This is because the line implies the whole planet is Equestria, whereas I prefer to leave the planet name vague and treat Equestria as a country.

-Changed Minuette saying "All week" to "a couple of days"
This was to alter the timescale of the chapter slightly.

-Added line "Of course, in Makarov's timeline we'd arrived and spent the first day looking for the Defiant. And then he'd spent the rest of that time setting up his war... Instead of being in a warzone yesterday we'd been settling into the Embassy."
This was added to clarify what Minuette was saying

-Changed "Mrs Bond's Apperance" to "The Bonds appearances"
The original referenced line mentioned both Admiral Bond and Mrs Bond, this clarifies it.

-Added to line "Triana, you see, was reunited... so we'd visited the whole place.", became "Triana, you see, was reunited... so we'd visited the whole place. There wasn't a South Triana to visit as a last leg anymore..."
A minor clarification of a line for personal preference.

-Changed "Despite what science fiction and Makarov claim, magic can be just as dangerous as technology." to "Just goes to show that in the wrong hooves and being misued, magic and technology can both be pretty dangerous."
I felt the original line painted both magic and technology in a bad light when the risks of both involve misuse.

-Changed "(Interviewer's Notes (Unicorn): Don't worry, Luna sets them straight on the next Nightmare Night.)/Good to know." to "(Interviewer's Notes (Unicorn): Actually, she just groaned and dismissed them as mostly harmless.)/Good to know."
I don't feel the Interviewers should be giving out what is basically future information like that.

-Changed ""Er, should be. Let everypony see their families and stuff..." Minuette said." to ""Er, should be. Let everypony see their families and stuff... Once we're done here in Kundu in a few days," Minuette said."
This was to further reinforce the timescale alterations.