I would like to suggest checking out a revised version, now with a graphic created by ColorfulTrick for the story.  I placed it in my gallery at fav.me/ddwhfto but will leave this link up for a while to help people find it.  Not a major change, but I wanted to use her image and, since I am not a CORE member, can not add it to a normal text submission.  Therefore, I created a PDF document which IS illustrated.  Check the notes on the page should you have trouble seeing it, or send me a note and I will try to assist you.